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Since land's birth,
since evolution's desperate clutch
for foothold close and quick,
the twinned escarpments gleamed.

And always Man looks up,
in hesitation with mind unguarded.
The cloned globes glancing
towards each other at last
as daylight grows dark momentarily in kissing.

Admirers gather in wonderment
in hopes of catching a swift glance
of the celestial engagement above.

Astral siblings, each with a duty,
perform their ritualistic dance
in the cloudless heaven.

In bittersweet joy the spurned satellite
sweeps westward shy of focus,
and pools itself for sleepers yet to rise.

The eyes of Man unglazed at last,
the journey of the supine lovers
almost lost to memory.

Awake at dawn, Heaven's eyes stare downward.
Sky's subtle shade comforts the drowsy heads
as they awaken from an ethereal slumber.

Abstract haze convinces the
mellow wanderings of divine thoughts.
Provoke the enigmatic pyramid of Life.
©2005-2009 ~seldomseenthinker
:iconseldomseenthinker:

Author's Comments

This collaborative piece was written by *jahg and myself. He has some fantastic poetry in his gallery, so go give him a visit.
I'm quite pleased with the end result and am happy to have had the chance to collaborate with him on this. :thumbsup:

I've updated the preview image again to something a bit more contemporary. This was made by *jahg in FireworksMX 2004.

Update: I've just added a voice clip of myself reading this piece. Upon clicking the link, it should open right up in your browser. It may possibly be a little indistinguishable in parts, due to the poor quality of my microphone and my voice, which keeps cracking through-out the reading. :|
Said voice clip can be found here: [link]

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:iconrushy:
:clap: I'm all for Mellow wanderings :clap:

Nicely done chaps :)

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In vino veritas, nunc est bibendum. - In wine is truth, now we must drink.
:iconseldomseenthinker:
Thank you very much, kind sir. :salute:
:icontappergurl:
Very enjoyable read, keeps the reader wanting to read more. :-) Great work there, good enuff to be published.
:iconcolinmawson:
very solid work, I can't say anything in particular stuck out at me but it painted a nice dreamy scene in my mind, definitely worth my time.
:iconthatguyonthestreet:
I'll never be able to figure out that damned romantic sky. :salute:

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I'm so goth, I have a fishnet umbrella.

Still will put pink wig in front of wang and take photo for sex.
:iconalex-sukehiro:
I like the fact that you use less-than-common words in your poetry. Not just "slumber" but "ehtereal slumber." You are very descriptive and that will allow you to go very far in the writing field, should you pursue it. :D
Very good. I liked this a lot. :hug:

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"If quitters never win, and winners never quit, then who is the idiot that said, 'Quit while you're ahead'?"

"Isn't Chicago a state?"
~Kyoko-Maxwell :D

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